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some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. what are the reasons for this behaviour? what can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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Some people tend to buy products that they can’t afford it and get into financial problems. There are a variety of reasons that lead to
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 situation.
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, commercial advertisement and people who want to show off.
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, these can be prevented by considering less attention to purchase things and inform about eventual financial problems. Nowadays everybody knows that TV-advertisement has a significant effect on people. Companies produce some innovative advertisements and invite some famous celebrities in order to advertise their goods. So some of the people may convince to buy even if they don’t need it.
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, in
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 modern world, mankind
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tends
 to have everything to show off. Some people think that owing new product even they don’t need it leads to high status in society. In
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 way they spend a lot of property and buy products as soon as it is launched. Yet, there are some approaches to stop them buying unnecessary stuff. The
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 thing is that we have to convince and inform them that buying unessential stuff will cause them to owe property and after that they lay themselves in a debt trap.
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, more attention to advertisements lead to buy more and more. It is a good way to pass advertisement of what we are eager to purchase.
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, it is better to have a little cash
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 your credit card when you want to go out,
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 you will get used to spending less money. In a conclusion, commercial advertisements, consumptive lifestyle in order to show off leads to unpleasant consequences. In fact, it is better to talk to them and persuade them to focus on saving for future and do not pay any attention to advertisements on TV, radio or social media

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