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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree or with this

#relationships #workplace #person #focus #work
The priorities of working vary from companies to companies. In some places, the
efford
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Efford
effort
afford
 of
maintain
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maintaining
 social networking within the workplace is not as important as completing given deadlines, while in another company, the opposite is true.
However
, it is not recommended to move the priority towards the end of any side of the spectrum. In
this
 essay, I am going to present reasons why I partially agree
to
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on
 priorities workers to focus on doing their
work
, and why I
also
 disagree with the motion stating that good connections are not as important as the ladder.
First
 of all, the main objective of any employees in a certain company or organization must be to perform and finish their tasks effectively as well as trying their best to improve the overall performance of the company due to various reasons
Firstly
, as people continue to concentrate on fulfilling their
responsibilites
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
, the overall output will increase
dramtically
in a very impressive manner
dramatically
 because the employees have no time to uselessly socialize or gossip with one another when they are supposed to be working.
For instance
, a research done by the university of
oxford
a university town in northern Mississippi; home of William Faulkner
Oxford
 on
employees
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employee
employees'
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 found that office workers who are mainly
associate
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associated
 themselves with their
work
 rather than pleasing or talking with other employees tend to be 24% more active in getting their tasks done before the deadline. Another reason is that, there will be a significant improvement of the level of professionalism within the organization, which usually is
result
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the result
a result
 of workers keeping their head clear and doing look at their jobs. When people
priorities
assign a priority to
prioritize
prioritise
 their
work
, their personal
work
 ethic will become better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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