Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nurturing a child have always been a paramount issue in every parent's

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would be more

concerning

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concerned

when children start a formal education. After

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question will arise that whether are educators influential in their

life

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or their father and mother? I believe that, after starting

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guide

learning the parent's influence would decrease while an increase in teachers' effect can be seen. Reasons for why schoolmasters have more effect is twofold.

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and for most, after enrolling

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school, students spend most of their time in school with their tutors rather than their family.

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, teachers are whom who have more opportunity to give a direction to scholars' attitudes toward all aspects of

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in compared to anyone else.

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, teachers' sole responsibility is teaching while parents tend to have

great deal

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a great deal

of other struggles beside their child.

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, they are not able to act in the same quality as teachers. As many studies have shown that if people concentrate just on one task they will act superior that focusing on multiple

duties

the specified day of the month

dates

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, it is believed that parents have greater impact on children because they only have to deal with their own child, while, teachers have the responsibility of

whole class

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the whole class

. But the fact is, teachers enter children's

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with the aim of teaching and as they are in touch with students in an educational environment, pupils would take them more seriously rather than their parents that they have

emotional relation

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emotional relations

an emotional relation

with. It is sensible to conclude that,

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there is an emotional bond among parents and their children, teachers affect them more as their job is teaching and they have more time to be spent

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pupils.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The government should be responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. While many people think that citizens should save money to take care of themselves when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)