Nowadays, more and more people are having consumer goods like refrigerators and washing machines. Does this development bring more advantages than disadvantages?

In these days, Most of people are becoming materialistic because of new functions in modern house
such
as refrigeration and indoor laundry and other appliances too. These effects have both positive and negative effects, but I personally believe that adverse effects of these technological devices on human and
environment
eclipsed their benefits.
To begin
with, one of the biggest advantages of using appliance is
considerable amount
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a considerable amount
of time which they save for us. By
this
I mean, these machines make people able to do
multi tasking
perform more than one task at the same time; originally of computers, now also more generally
multitasking
to complete the entire task one time which can be used for productive activities.
For example
, city people who are busy due to hectic work schedule are relying on
microwave
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the microwave
for preparing the meals and dishwasher to do dishes to reduce work stress.
On the other hand
, the advent of these machines posse’s serious
threat
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threats
to human body.
In other words
, over reliance on equipments
such
as washing machine, has
reduced workout
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a reduced workout
by cutting down physical movement and tends to lots of diseases
such
as obesity, blood pressure.
For instance
, one medical study pointed out that either we need to go a gym if we do not abandon machines or need to do household activities to stay healthy and fit.
Moreover
,
environment
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the environment
is
also
being
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
due to surge in
number
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the number
of electronics in every house.
This
is to say that, many people do not know the use of CRF has a fatal effect on the
environment
, as it triggers global warming. Statistics from credible sources
also reveals
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also reveal
that air conditional and central heaters are used in every corner of
world
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the world
a world
which is very harmful for ozone layer
on
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of
the earth. In conclusion, it
is true that number
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is true that a number
of people who own
electronics household
Accept comma addition
electronics, household
gadget has significantly in the past few years. In spite of all benefits, I personally believe that it has more drawbacks for our life, as these products could have
serious effect
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serious effects
a serious effect
on our body and
environment
as well.
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