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Machines will one day in the future replace humans and collect some of their employments. Do the advantages of these machines outweigh the disadvantages.

#machines #future #humans #employments
Today
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 people live in
fast paced world
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a fast paced world
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and the of
work
 is changing rapidly. It is believed that automatic machines would take
place
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the place
 of human beings for making life
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Although
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this
 aspect has reasonable merits yet the
demirts
an advocate of democratic principles
democrats
 can not be ignored and in my view
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it is not totally profitable for society and replacement of machines with human put adverse impact
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 Discussing the merits of technical gadgets
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the main benefit goes to workplaces
nd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 industries since it will improve productivity and reduce the extra expenditures of labour
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Maintanence
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Maintenance
 of
recordes
anything (such as a document or a phonograph record or a photograph) providing permanent evidence of or information about past events
records
recorded
 in offices would appropriate and the least chances of inaccuracy
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 It is undeniable that
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time is precious which can be saved if the works are done with gadgets
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Not only time money
also
 save with
this
 technique since these are one time investment and
then
 after the expenditure are too low and
work
 efficiency is more while for labouring more money is needed. Despite few merits
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 demerits of
this
 facet keep high load.
First
 of all, use of machines take birth to unemployment. Many people unemployed from their jobs or sometimes they have to
work
 on low costs
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Secondly
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when the gadgets get damage suddenly and the whole
work
 of that workplace
hault
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
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In other words
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in the absence of one labourer
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other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 labourer can continue remaining
work
.Eventually
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some works are like that which cannot be possible without human because AI has no
immotions
any strong feeling
emotions
emotion
emissions
 as
human
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humans
a human
 can understand the pain of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 person.These things
work
 under human mind if it replaced with person who will control them. In conclusion
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it is evident that
advantages
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the advantages
 of AI carry less water than disadvantages.
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