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percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

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The pie charts provide information about the
proportion
 of
water
 used for three purposes, namely: industrial, agricultural and domestic use, in six different areas of the world. Overall, we see that in four areas of the world, the highest percentage of
water
 was used FOR (in) agricultural purposes, while the minor
proportion
 of
water
 was used in the industrial and domestic purpose.
In contrast
,
water
 for domestic purposes was used in A (
an
Suggestion
a
) roughly insignificant amount in all of the areas around the world, with the exception of South America. Regarding the agricultural use of
water
, we see that the major
proportion
 of
water
 was used in Central Asia, 88%, being followed by Africa and South Asia with 84% and 81% respectively.
Similarly
, in South America, around 71% of the total percentage of
water
 was utilized for agriculture. Turning to the domestic purpose, in South America was used roughly 19% of
WATER
, WHILE (
water
. While) all other areas registered, at between 7% and 15%.
In addition
, in Europe and North America, approximately half of the total
proportion
 of
water
 was used for industrial use.

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