Many people think children should not be punished at early ages. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishment may be applied for children?

There are lots of
argument
Suggestion
arguments
about whether youngsters should be
panalize
impose a penalty on; inflict punishment on
penalized
or they should be taught without
punishment
. Some say if they will be punished for some commitment, it will come across as a trauma in their life.
However
, others, myself included, argue that without
punishment
lessons cannot be learnt effectively. In
this
essay I will explain my idea and give some examples about what should be done as
punishment
. Having said that, children may commit any sort of crime which require some lessons to be taught. The reason behind the lesson that in their after life they will be punished for what they did and may suffer
severly
to a severe or serious degree
severely
because of consequences
such
as monetary penalty or imprisonment. Take almost every prisoner
for instance
. If their childhood would be investigated, probably lack of family care might be understood, which is
entail
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entailed
of
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on
not to punished
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not to punishing
don't punish
them appropriately.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that penalizing children
is
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are
extremly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
important since it may prevent them to pull off worse things in the future, not to mention possible price they will pay.
Moreove
in addition
Moreover
, it is crucial that how to penalize them without
cause any
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cause, any
trauma since there are lots of people who had suffered during childhood because of
parent's
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the parents' punishment
parents' punishment
punishment
.
First
of all, the main goal should be
benefit
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the benefit
of the young one and it should not be forgotten that they are not able to disguise which is good or bad.
However
, they should learn their differences at some point.
Therefore
, as a
punisment
the act of punishing
punishment
, the most valuable thing might be taken away from them
such
as the Internet, nowadays. Absence of very critical item would lead them to think what they have done and in the future, when they remember that feeling, they would comprehend that
sometings
the context and environment in which something is set
settings
are going wrong. Another
punishment
might be cutting their
pocet
a small pouch inside a garment for carrying small articles
pocket
money off,
for example
. By doing that they
,
Accept space
,
also
, would think about possible consequences of their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. To conclude,
although
youngsters may be taught as very naive to overcome any
punishment
, I
totaly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
totally
believe that they should not be regarded as that way and should pay the prize of their doings by their
pocet
a small pouch inside a garment for carrying small articles
pocket
past
post
money or
valueable
having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange
valuable
things, which is mentioned above.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
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