Many people think children should not be punished at early ages. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishment may be applied for children?

There are lots of arguments about whether youngsters should be
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penalized
or they should be taught without
punishment
. Some say if they will be punished for some commitment, it will come across as a trauma in their life.
However
, others, myself included, argue that without
punishment
lessons cannot be learnt effectively. In
this
essay I will explain my idea and give some examples about what should be done as
punishment
. Having said that, children may commit any sort of crime which require some lessons to be taught. The reason behind the lesson that in their after life they will be punished for what they did and may suffer severely because of consequences
such
as monetary penalty or imprisonment. Take almost every prisoner
for instance
. If their childhood would be investigated, probably lack of family care might be understood, which is
entail
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entailed
of
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on
not to punished
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not to punishing
don't punish
them appropriately.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that penalizing children
is
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are
extremely important since it may prevent them to pull off worse things in the future, not to mention possible price they will pay.
Moreover
, it is crucial that how to penalize them without
cause any
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cause, any
trauma since there are lots of people who had suffered during childhood because of the parents’
punishment
.
First
of all, the main goal should be the benefit of the young one and it should not be forgotten that they are not able to disguise which is good or bad.
However
, they should learn their differences at some point.
Therefore
, as a
punishment
, the most valuable thing might be taken away from them
such
as the Internet, nowadays. Absence of very critical item would lead them to think what they have done and, in the future, when they remember that feeling, they would comprehend that
somethings
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some things
are going wrong. Another
punishment
might be cutting their pocket money off,
for example
. By doing that they,
also
, would think about possible consequences of their behaviour. To conclude,
although
youngsters may be taught as very naive to overcome any
punishment
, I totally believe that they should not be regarded as that way and should pay the prize of their doings by their pocket money or valuable things, which is mentioned above.
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