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Some people think the qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the recent competitive era, the success of a human being
is depend
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is depending
depends
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Few
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Fewer
 masses hold that the mankind can not gain the appropriate values from higher education institutions to become
successful person
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a successful person
 in life
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 I firmly disagree with the given viewpoint. In my coming paragraphs
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I shall shed light on my viewpoints.
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 and foremost
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 the education institutions provide
platform
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a platform
the platform
 to upgrade the skills of the learners
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The students get multiple chances to earn name and fame through University opportunities.
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the higher institutions bless the youngest with various chances of placement in their field
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with the help of these opportunities the students can spike their future
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So, I think the higher institutions are
sole platform
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a sole platform
 to build
career
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careers
 of the young ones.
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, colleges and universities
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also shift
are also shifting
are also shifted
have also shifted
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 shift the moral compass of the students toward
welfare
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the welfare
 of the society. There are many different workshops
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which are attended by the learners in their academic years
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 with the help of these workshops
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the students come across the social problems. To illustrate, mostly the surveys
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on
 various subjects are based on social problems
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which allows the young blood to knock the door social welfare. So
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I think a successful person should have social and educational skills
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which can be only provided by proper education institutions. I think
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the universities play a vital role in the life of students
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which make youngsters successful person.

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