The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010

The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010
The line graph gives data about
harvesting
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the harvesting
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of
potato
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potatoes
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in three different countries as : New South Wales,
Victoria
, and Queensland during the five-year period from 2005 to 2010.
Overall
, showing
downward
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a downward
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trend
Victoria
was
dominant
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a dominant
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country at the beginning of the given period. Meanwhile, Queensland which had average
tonnes
of yield take a lead in five years.
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at the details we can see that harvest of New South Wales which showed the lowest point in 2005, before falling steadily to just over 10
million
tonnes
in 2010,
increased
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slightly to just above 20
million
in 2006 . Going down in 1 year by about 4
million
tonnes
Victoria
's harvesting boomed to 40
million
tonnes
. By the end of the period
yield
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the yield
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of
Victoria
went up by 10
million
tonnes
of potato.
By contrast
, Queensland's harvesting rose to nearly 30
million
tonnes
in 2010 , after
slight
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a slight
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reduction to well under 20
million
in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words victoria, tonnes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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