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The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010

The line graph below shows information about Potato harvest in three countries between 2005 and 2010
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The line graph gives data about
harvesting
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the harvesting
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 of
potato
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potatoes
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 in three different countries as : New South Wales,
Victoria
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, and Queensland during the five-year period from 2005 to 2010.
Overall
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, showing
downward
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a downward
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 trend
Victoria
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 was
dominant
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a dominant
the dominant
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 country at the beginning of the given period. Meanwhile, Queensland which had average
tonnes
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 of yield take a lead in five years.
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 at the details we can see that harvest of New South Wales which showed the lowest point in 2005, before falling steadily to just over 10
million
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tonnes
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 in 2010,
increased
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 slightly to just above 20
million
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 in 2006 . Going down in 1 year by about 4
million
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tonnes
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Victoria
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's harvesting boomed to 40
million
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tonnes
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. By the end of the period
yield
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the yield
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 of
Victoria
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 went up by 10
million
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tonnes
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 of potato.
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, Queensland's harvesting rose to nearly 30
million
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tonnes
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 in 2010 , after
slight
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a slight
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 reduction to well under 20
million
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 in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words victoria, tonnes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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