Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

There is no scepticism human development is
complex interplay
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a complex interplay
of many factors.
therefore
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Therefore
, some people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that television
,
Accept space
,
peer and music have an imperative role in
child's growth
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the child's growth
,
Accept space
,
others hold an
oipnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opening
open
family bonding is still more crucial factors to nurture them.In my opinion
,
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,
all the stated factors are equally important.
on
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On
the one hand, some people in favour of
telivision
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
,
Accept space
,
peers and music
becauseof
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because of
the working culture of both parents. Parents
dont
do not
don't
have enough time to spend with children
.
Accept space
.
Hence
,
Accept space
,
nowadays.
children
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Children
spend
biggest chunk
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the biggest chunk
of their time
infront
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in front
of
screen
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the screen
a screen
and what they watch and listen from TV reflects
in
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on
their personality.In terms of
peer
a general name for alcoholic beverages made by fermenting a cereal (or mixture of cereals) flavored with hops
beer
,
nuclear family
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the nuclear family
has become
norm
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the norm
of the day
.
Accept space
.
Consequently
,
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,
no grandparent is at home to cultivate some moral
charcters
an imaginary person represented in a work of fiction (play or film or story)
characters
into them
.
Accept space
.
Therefore
, they come under the influence of friends and learn so many things from friends. So, Influence source of entertainment
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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