In many countries people working in sport and entertainment earn much more money than professionals like doctors, nurses and teachers. Why do you think this happens in some societies and do you consider it is good or bad?

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It is undoubtedly true that there is often a major imbalance between the salaries of the professional classes and celebrities from the worlds of sport and entertainment. At first sight,

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seems unjust, but on closer

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it is easy to understand why it happens and see that it is almost inevitable. It does often seem wrong that certain people should earn so much money when their only talent is to entertain.

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giving pleasure is important, people in the medical and educational professions have far more important roles in society.

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, a surgeon can save your life in the operating theatre and a teacher can prepare you for your career. Indeed, because both doctors and teachers are so vital to any society, it would seem only right that they receive the largest financial rewards. When,

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, we look to see who earns the most, we discover that it is typically sports and entertainment personalities. There are a variety of reasons why

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should be.

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, we live in the age of mass media: these people earn so much because they are national or even global stars and get rewarded through endorsements and other sources of income.

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, these stars are unique in a way doctors and teachers are not, often they can do what no one else can.

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, sometimes these stars may have short careers in comparison with other professions.

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doctors can work until they are 65, footballers normally retire in their early 30s. I personally believe that in the ideal

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someone’s income would relate to their value to society.

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, in the modern world, it is almost unavoidable the famous will have the highest incomes because of their media exposure.

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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement

In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.