It is more important to spend public money promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

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Of course it goes without saying that prevention is better than cure.
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why, in recent years, there has been a growing body of opinion in favour of putting more resources into promoting a healthy lifestyle. I agree that by promoting a healthy lifestyle, there will be fewer people requiring treatment and
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the amount spent on curing ill
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could be reduced substantially. As many modern diseases are a consequence of our lifestyles, one way of making savings to the
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budget would be to educate people about how to prevent expensive
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problems
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as diabetes or heart disease. Most medical doctors today do not have the time to (nor are they paid for)
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to teach
patients how to make these changes to their lifestyle through diet or exercise. The government can take the help of pervasive media
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as TV and radio to educate people. It is understandable that when people are sick they want the best medical treatment possible, with access to the latest diagnostic equipment, expensive MRI scanners,
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. If the problem is life threatening
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we demand complex operations
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as open-heart surgery or organ transplants.
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procedures usually require intensive nursing care and lengthy periods of hospitalization, which are costly.
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, there are many diseases which, if diagnosed early through proper screening tests can be treated very easily.
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, cancer of the cervix can be diagnosed with a very simple, inexpensive outdoor test called the pap smear. If the government spends a little amount to provide
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screening tests free of
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then then
a lot of money needed for expensive treatments could be saved later on. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that it would be definitely worthwhile to divert the
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The health
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budget towards prevention of diseases. By doing so the nation would be healthier and automatically the cost of treatment would cut down.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • chronic diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • public health campaigns
  • lifestyle-related illnesses
  • quality of life
  • health-conscious society
  • allocate funds
  • balanced healthcare system
  • comprehensive healthcare strategy
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