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Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #hobbies
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According to some people, only those who have demanding hobbies can have fun. I totally disagree with
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hobby whether
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hobby, whether
 it is relaxing or challenging can be pleasurable and people usually choose their
hobby
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 based on their personal skills and interest. On the one hand, some people find it more enjoyable when they spend their leisure time doing easy hobbies that are more relaxed
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rather than complicated. One example of an activity
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 easy for most people is swimming
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This
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hobby
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 requires very little equipment, it is simple to learn, and it is inexpensive I remember learning to swim
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 my home town’s river when I was
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a child
, and I never felt like a demanding or challenging experience. Another
hobby
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 that I find easy and fun is drawing. In my opinion, anyone can draw interesting pictures of comic
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a man distinguished by exceptional courage and nobility and strength
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 without knowing too much about the drawing. Despite being a bit difficult, drawing is a satisfying activity.
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, difficult hobbies can sometimes be more exciting. If an activity is more challenging, we might feel a greater sense of satisfaction when we manage to do it successfully.
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 teaching language to children is a
hobby
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 that requires a high level of knowledge and expertise. In my case
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 it took me around ten years before when I start going to school, there were times when she
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 us passionately. I believe that many hobbies give us more pleasure when we reach a higher level of performance because the results are better and feeling of achievement is greater. In conclusion, simple hobbies can be fun and enjoyable, but difficult hobbies can be equally pleasurable for different reasons
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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