Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Money and recreation
time
play an imperative role in everyone's life. According to the given statement, having much money and shortage of past-
time
is better
instead
of less finances and having much spare -
time
.
This
essay will analyse both the standpoints and put forth the personal opinion in the ensuing paragraphs. To commence with
disscusion
freedom to act or judge on one's own
discretion
in the
first
view, there are many negative aspects rather than the Positive ones. In the favour of negative one,
first
and foremost is that frantic schedule because both the partners are working
,
Accept space
,
they do not much
time
to spend with their family members because they spend
alot
Suggestion
a lot
of
time
at work place.Apart from
this
, it's increase less family bonding between family and friends.
Secondly
, there are many
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
hazards inclined day by day because employees spend
time
sitting at working place
,
Accept space
,
they do not enough
time
spend with
yourself with
Accept comma addition
yourself, with
different activities
such
as gym, jogging, running and countless more.
On the other hand
, positive point more money is better education facilities, better
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and so on. On the
filp
lightly throw to see which side comes up
flip
flop
side, there are many advantages rather than the disadvantage.
people
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People
have much spare
time
spending with near and dear ones. People have
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
to learn new skills like
forigen
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
languages, cooking, shopping, and so on. Moving ahead, people have
alot
Suggestion
a lot
of
time
spend with physical fitness with different activities
such
as outdoor as well as indoor activities.
In contrast
, there are many negative impact on young minds. People are
incalting
be a signal for or a symptom of
indicating
including
bad habits like crime related, murder, theft and
count less
too numerous to be counted
countless
more. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that both aspects are
equal
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equally
important role
play
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played
in
individuals
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individual's
individual
life. According to personal estimation, joint efforts have a better solution to solve
monotous
rountine
an unvarying or habitual method or procedure
routine
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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