THE EXCESSIVE USE OF COMPUTERS AND TELEVISIONS IS RETARDING THE GROWTH IN CHILDREN WHICH IS SHOWN IN RECENT STUDIES. HOW FAR DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE TO THIS STATEMENT?

#computers #televisions #growth #children #studies

this

modern era technology is increasing day by day and

therefore

now it is very common to see all age groups becoming increasingly involved in technology and its use.

while

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While

there

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are

also

some negative impacts of using

this

technology or modern gadgets like television or computer on

children growth

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a child's growth

child's growth

children's growth

child growth

or mind of

this

generation.

To begin

with

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it is known to all that excess use of everything is bad that thing no one can denies.

Likewise much use

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Likewise, much use

Likewise the much use

Likewise the much use the much use

of computer and television can

also

harm the health of children

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because children do not know how to balance or limit the

time

spent of these

devises

an inclination or desire; used in the plural in the phrase 'left to your own devices'

devices

as a

result their

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result, their

academics

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academic

results will suffer or

this

can

also

effect

have an effect upon

affect

their ability to learn or retain.

That is

the main reason children are becoming more cough as they are spending

long

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a long time

time

sitting in front of computers and televisions and due to lack of physical activities

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So the obesity is a very common problem among them.

Furthermore

, young children are

also

spending all their precious

time

in playing video games and watching different kinds of programs

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So that they are unable to complete their homework or other

study

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student

projects.

surfing

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Surfing

internet

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the internet

on computer is

also

a another problem for them because they do not know how to choose a right

channels

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channel

to watch.

Therefore

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I would conclude by saying that the

time

spent by children in television and computers requires strict regulation by parents or elders as they can focus to build their knowledge or other skills for their

better

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best

growth and future.

Fri Apr 24 2020

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THE EXCESSIVE USE OF COMPUTERS AND TELEVISIONS IS RETARDING THE GROWTH IN CHILDREN WHICH IS SHOWN IN RECENT STUDIES. HOW FAR DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE TO THIS STATEMENT?

Fully explain your ideas

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world help the poorer countries develop in terms of feeding the population, education and health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for lesuire activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

These days people in some countries are living in a “throw-away” society which means people use things in a short time then throw them away. Causes and problems.

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?