Some people think that children's free time must include educational activities otherwise they will waste their time. What is your opinion?

Some people think that children's free
time
must include educational activities
otherwise
they will waste their
time
. What is your opinion? Many children have extra
time
in school and lessons. Some people believe that
this
time
should be best spent including an educational activity while others believe it is best for them to enjoy their freedom. I believe that children should have the freedom to do what they desire with the extra
time
they have. The education system has been becoming
little bit
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a little bit
more competitive
.
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Many parents and teachers believe that it is important for their kids to take more classes during their free
time
,
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,
they
also
think that earning a new language or going for tuition can improve their grades which makes applying to university easier. Many parents believe that by taking part in educational activities during their free
time
will give them an upper hand over other children's
.
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.
In my opinion a child’s free
time
does not have to include an educational activity because in future they can improve their chances at university only
.
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.
The disadvantages
from
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of
doing
this
can be that the kids will feel nervous
,
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,
at some point they will stop thinking because their brain will stop and
also
their
in or at that place
there
will start to disobey their parents in
future
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the future
.
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.

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