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some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea while others disagree strongly with. Consider both sides of this debates and present your own idea. You should give reasons for your answer and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience

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The table shows the classification of the family type the
poverty
 population in Australia in 1999. The data informs proportion of
poverty
 household among the other citizen. At the
first
 glance of the table reveal that the
poverty
number
 is the highest single and sole parent.
Firstly
, the aged couple
house hold
a social unit living together
household
 is the least
number
 of the proportion. Sequentially, the single aged person and couple without children is six and seven percentage.
However
, there is a significant difference between couple children who are 12 percent and other.
Moreover
, the single without children and sole parent reached a higher
number
 of the
poverty
 population. Particularly, the
number
 of sole parent is the highest value according to graph. Overall, the ten percent of the proportion shows that the
poverty
 people live below the life standard in Australia.
Moreover
, the except of the single aged person, the small households cope with the
poverty
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • life experience
  • independent
  • practical skills
  • reflect
  • educational and career goals
  • academic environment
  • adjust to
  • disinterested
  • counterproductive
  • internships
  • volunteering
  • enrich
  • perspective
  • resume
  • economic considerations
  • financial constraints
  • privilege
  • personal growth
  • acquiring new skills
  • sense of direction
  • immensely beneficial
  • well-planned
  • aligned
  • future goals
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