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The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006

The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006
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 the percentage of
Australia
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women
's
age
 groups when they
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 their first child in three separate years (1966, 1986 and 2006). 
Overall
,
while
 there was an
overall
 upward trend in the proportion of first-time mothers aged 24 or over, a downward trend could be seen in the
women
 in the
age
 range of 20 to 24 or under.   In 1966, the vast majority of
women
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 birth to their first child made up above 60%, compared to the 19s or under
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much lower, which was around 35%. The figures for
women
 aged 20 to 24 gradually decreased by roughly 20%, at 40% in 1898 and ended at around 33%
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 the end of the period. The percentage for the 19s or under dropped by 20%, to 40% in 1986 and decreased triple its ratio
at
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1966 in 2006.   Turning to the three remaining
age
 categories, the percentage of the 30-34s and the 34-39s who
giving
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 their first child abruptly surge by above 40% and by 33% respectively throughout the period of 40 years. In 1966, there was around 37% of the 25-
30s
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 and 3% of the 40
age
 group
of
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 above,
then
 these figures climbed to 42% and only 4% in 2006.
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