The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006
The data sources clearly
communicates
the percentage of Change the verb form
communicate
Australia
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Australian
women
's age
groups when they delivery
their first child in three separate years (1966, 1986 and 2006).
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deliver
Overall
, while
there was an overall
upward trend in the proportion of first-time mothers aged 24 or over, a downward trend could be seen in the women
in the age
range of 20 to 24 or under.
In 1966, the vast majority of women
gave
birth to their first child made up above 60%, compared to the 19s or under Correct pronoun usage
who gave
was
much lower, which was around 35%. The figures for Unnecessary verb
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women
aged 20 to 24 gradually decreased by roughly 20%, at 40% in 1898 and ended at around 33% in
the end of the period. The percentage for the 19s or under dropped by 20%, to 40% in 1986 and decreased triple its ratio Change the preposition
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at
1966 in 2006.
Turning to the three remaining Change preposition
apply
age
categories, the percentage of the 30-34s and the 34-39s who giving
their first child abruptly surge by above 40% and by 33% respectively throughout the period of 40 years. In 1966, there was around 37% of the 25-Wrong verb form
give
30s
and 3% of the 40 Change the article
the 30s
age
group of
above, Correct your spelling
or
then
these figures climbed to 42% and only 4% in 2006.Submitted by monikahuynh152 on
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