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The data sources clearly communicates the
production
 of five different
energy
Suggestion
energies
 (gas, coal, nuclear,
petro
Suggestion
Petro
petrol
patrol
 and other) over the period of 10 years.  Overall, while there was an upward trend in the
production
 of almost
energy
 except nuclear
energy
.
(
Accept space
(
a
Suggestion
A
 downward trend could be seen in nuclear
energy
production
 over the 10-year period. ) The only downward trend in the 2005's pie chart illustrates the decreasing of nuclear power in a decade.  In 1995, around 29,80% coal
energy
 is produced, followed by gas and
petro
Suggestion
petrol
energy
, which were 29,63% and 29,27% respectively. The figure for coal
energy
 and gas
energy
 slightly increased slightly to 30.93% and 30.31% respectively in the
next
 ten years.
By contrast
,
petro
Suggestion
Petro
petrol
production
 saw a significant decrease, from 29.27% in 1995 to 19.55% in 2005.  Turning to the remaining
energy
 productions, which are nuclear
energy
production
 and other
energy
production
. Both of them were increased slightly, by about 4% and 3.5% individually.
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