The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity
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The diagram represents the data
how
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geothermal energy is used to manufacture
electricity
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Overall
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, there are 5 stages in the whole producing
electricity
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process, beginning with the pumping down cold
water
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and ending with the producing
electricity
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.
To begin
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, cold
water
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is pumped down 4.5 km through
injection
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an injection
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well.
Following
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this
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, the
water
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is implanted into the geothermal zone where hot rocks are injected into the production well .
Then
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, the hot
water
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is pumped up to the ground through the condenser. The
last
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two steps are made
in
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the
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apply
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above ground.First of all, the hot
water
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is become
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steam in the
consender
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contender
sender
.
Following
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this
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, the steam enters
into
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the turbine and the turbine
make
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it
spin
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a spin
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.
Finally
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, the generator, which is powered by
turbine
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a turbine
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, produces
electricity
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "following this".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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