The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity
The diagram represents the data
how
geothermal energy is used to manufacture Change preposition
on how
electricity
Overall
, there are 5 stages in the whole producing electricity
process, beginning with the pumping down cold water
and ending with the producing electricity
.
To begin
, cold water
is pumped down 4.5 km through injection
well.Correct article usage
an injection
Following
this
, the water
is implanted into the geothermal zone where hot rocks are injected into the production well .Then
, the hot water
is pumped up to the ground through the condenser.
The last
two steps are made in
Change preposition
apply
the
above ground.First of all, the hot Correct article usage
apply
water
is become
steam in the Change to the active voice
becomes
has become
consender
.Correct your spelling
contender
sender
Following
this
, the steam enters into
the turbine and the turbine Change preposition
apply
make
it Change the verb form
makes
spin
.Add an article
a spin
Finally
, the generator, which is powered by turbine
, produces Add an article
a turbine
electricity
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