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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #language
People always find the idea of living in overseas much more appealing rather than their own countries, meanwhile the importance of knowing l
ocal
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the local language
language
 ignored which provokes social and practical problems. In
this
 very important r
espect I
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respect, I
am highly concerned about social problems, which always surpasses the extent of practical problems due to lack of foreign
language
. On the one hand, practical problems related to not knowing the mother tongue of the country where people live are inevitable.
Nonetheless
, they are easy to tackle due to the achieved advancements in technology.
For example
, applications like Google map on smart phones, computers manage to find the locations, without being in contact with natives. Apparently internet provides all these accesses in these circumstances. Another example is Google translate which minimizes the
language
 barrier, by conveying the message effectively via i
nternet.
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the internet
On the other hand
, immigrants as well as m
igrants mostly
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migrants, mostly
suffer from the social problems.
Firstly
, those who do not speak the local
language
 are d
eprive
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deprived
of the local culture, since they cannot be in close contact with the residents. Obviously,
this
 process ends up in a segregation.
Moreover
, in terms of country’s norms, rules, regulations the drawbacks of misunderstanding leads discriminations between those who are new and local. I
t
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It's
obvious that, a
language
 factor may raise violent reactions and possible social crises. To sum up,
language
 as a borderline cause definite problems and I admit that social problems are excessively h
ard
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harder
to endure than the practical problems.
Therefore
, people need to ponder the highlighted social problems not to experience negative cases.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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