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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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In the recent era, the increasing number of vehicles on
road
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the road
 is becoming a serious issue. There are multiple reasons behind the uplifting number of wheelers on
road
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the road
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I shall shed light on the causes and solutions
of
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to
 traffic congestion. On the reasons side
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the people
offenly
in an open way
openly
use
 their private vehicle for job purpose.The masses hardly
use
 public
transport
 to mobile from one place to another
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To illustrate, In big cities the working hours of people
are depend
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depend
 upon the need of the companies
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So
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the human being
want
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wants
 to
use
 their own wheelers to go for
job
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a job
the job
jobs
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The human beings do not have patience and time to wait for the public
transport
.Apart from
this
, Due to the impact of
global village
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the global village
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the people are much more interested in
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
.The travellers want to
use
 their
convienient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 means of
transport
 to go at various places. On turning to the
measures
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measurement
measure
measurable
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the higher authorities should encourage the masses to
use
 public
transport
.The government should provide various
concession
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concessions
 on government means of
transport
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so that
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it can shift the mind compass of people toward the increase demand of public
transport
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For example
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the higher administration should bless the people with quick and comfortable
buses
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bus
 service
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With the help of
this
 higher
rank service
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rank, service
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the people will choose public
transport
 unquestionably.
Moreover
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the human body should
also
 believe in sharing the private means of
transport
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There are multiple ways with which mankind can share their personal wheelers
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 In conclusion
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the increasing number of vehicles on
road
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the road
roads
 is
critical problem
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a critical problem
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It has many reasons and we all should come one step forward to tackle
this
 issue.
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