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The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010
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These data sources clearly
communicates
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that
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the changes in real estate values in three different nations over the period of three years.
Overall
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,
while
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 there was an upward trend in the prices of property in
China
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, a downward trend could be seen in
the
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Algeria
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 and
Argentina
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's figures. It is
also
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 noticeable that the figure for
China
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 experienced
the
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enormous growth and
Algeria
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's percentage showed the opposite trend. In 2007, the prices of property in
Algeria
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was
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were
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 the highest cost, at over 6.0%, compared with
China
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 and
Argentina
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 with only 2.0% and above 3.0% respectively. In the following year,
China
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 and
Argentina
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 witnessed
the
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 slight decrease, up to 4.2% and nearly 5% individually.
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,
Algeria
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's rate had a slight lull, from above 6.0 in 2007 to only 4.5% in 2008. From 2009 to 2010,
China
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 experienced a constant rise in its rate and reached a peak of nearly 7.0%
in
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 the end of the period,
whereas
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Argentina
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's proportion showed a significant drop by roughly 4% in 2009 before
increased
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increasing
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 slightly again to 2,6% in 2010. The percentage of
Algeria
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's property value dropped slightly by 0.1% and ended at 3.0% in 2010.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, algeria, argentina with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage growth
  • average property prices
  • economic conditions
  • real estate market
  • year-to-year growth rate
  • government policies
  • international events
  • growth trend
  • investment attractiveness
  • socioeconomic status
  • forecasting
  • infrastructure projects
  • real estate laws
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