Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying in their career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

in
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In
this
globalized aeon, without any qualms it is accepted that
job
is
essential part
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an essential part
to provide
satification
the act of certifying or bestowing a franchise on
certification
in career life,
sothat
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so that
a section of society
coincide
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coincides
that
people
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person's
person
whobacome
employee in the early age
aquire
gotten through environmental forces
acquired
satisficaton
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
than who change the
job
constantly.
hovever
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However
Hovever
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
disagree
wuth
expresses the means used
with
the notion.
llets
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Let's
Lets
Lots
Llets
popnder
reflect deeply on a subject
ponder
depper
relatively deep or strong; affecting one deeply
deeper
to get more
clearity
free from obscurity and easy to understand; the comprehensibility of clear expression
clarity
on
this
topic.
to
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To
mmence
make less severe or harsh
mince
with, it is irrefutable that
,
Accept space
,
nowdats
nuts or fruit pieces in a sugar paste
nougats
now dats
, people change their
job
persistantly
in a persistent manner
persistently
till they
cacn
able to
can
not find the
job
of
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
.
the
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The
plethora advantages
are entwine
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are entwined
with
this
phenonmenon
any state or process known through the senses rather than by intuition or reasoning
phenomenon
where
first
and foremost paramount merit is that
,
Accept space
,
as people change their
job
continously
at every point
continuously
,
Accept space
,
then
can get huge knowledge of every field and they can thrive their skill in every
job
.
as
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As
a result, experience
make
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makes
them
multiskilled person
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a multi skilled person
multi skilled person
.
after
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After
finding
desirable
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a desirable job
job
, they get
interest
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interested
in working and be
passinate person
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a passionate person
passionate person
to ward
near
toward
job
which provide them long term satisfaction.
as
Suggestion
As
they they have many skill people can find the new employment after
eleminating
terminate, end, or take out
eliminating
elimination
form
a giver or sender
from
one
company.
one
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One
the other hand
,
Accept space
,
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
=it is undeniable that be the employee in early age bring manifold
metis
a pair of people who live together
mates
meats
for them.
people
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People
can attain a chance of
buildidng
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
their
carre
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
in their early age and start
earnig
earn on some commercial or business transaction; earn as salary or wages
earning
soon which helps to
suppert
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
the family in economic term.
further more
in addition
Furthermore
Further more
, people
also
get a
chcance
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
chance
of
accomplish
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accomplishing
their dream
.
Accept space
.
however
Suggestion
However
, people
speacilize
take part in social activities; interact with others
socialize
specialize
their
skillonly
Suggestion
skill only
for
one
job
,
Accept space
,
may face
troble
a source of difficulty
trouble
troubles
to find a new
job
after leaving
a
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an
early
job
due to limitation in skills which provide short term satisfaction.
to
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To
synopsize
a sketchy summary of the main points of an argument or theory
synopsis
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
reiterate my opinion that
,
Accept space
,
because
od
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
the changing
job
, people
becamme
enter or assume a certain state or condition
became
become
becomes
mutiskilled
persong
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per song
which
proviede
established beyond doubt
proved
provides
provide
satisfication
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satisfactory
satisfaction
satisfactorily
rather than who engage with the
one
job
from
earliar life
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an earlier life
earlier life
earlier lives
.
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