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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system.

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
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The
education
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system
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, in most of the countries, is mainly supported by the government while private schools are expensive as private organisations maintain them. Some people opine that parents, who send their children to private schools, should be exempted from paying
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 for
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 as they pay the full amount of
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 to a private
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. I personally disagree with
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 proposed policy.
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 of all, the government does not force anyone to educate his children in a private
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. If someone chooses to send his child to a private
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, he accepts the higher fee willingly. From a practical point of view, affluent citizens send their children to private schools and they are higher
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 payers. If they are excused from the
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, the government would have a hard time managing the state-supported
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system
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.
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, a double standard in
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 would create an outcry among the populace.
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, all citizens should spontaneously pay the
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tax
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 to fulfil their duty to the country. The money collected through
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 is used to run the
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system
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 of the country.
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, not all citizens utilise the services that are provided to the public by the
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 payers money.
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, many city-dwellers always turn to private health care services despite they pay taxes for the state-owned medical facilities.
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 is why dual
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 policy for individuals who send their offspring to a private
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 would deteriorate the whole
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 collecting
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. In conclusion, I strongly support that every citizen, no matter whether they send their children to public or private schools, should pay the
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 to contribute to enhancing the
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system
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 of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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