exposure to international media like T.V, flims, magazines etc, has had significant impact on local culture. Do advantages overwright the disadvantages.

Media is one of the greatest
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
in people's life.International media
has highly impacted
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have highly impacted
local people's life and their culture.
However it's
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However, its
However its
effects have always been a matter of debate.
To
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In
my opinion
,
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,
the bright side of
such
exposures overshadows its dark side.
To begin
with
,
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,
today
,
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,
local people are the most targeted audience.There has been a revolutionary change in their lifestyle.They have started to adapt the lifestyle shown by the international media.
For instance
,
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,
people of the local culture have changed themselves as per the fashion trends of the global market.They try to imitate the haircuts and other grooming things adopted by the celebrities.
Moreover
,
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,
some films are social message
driven which
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driven, which
inturn
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in turn
leads to change the taboo in the local culture.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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