Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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It is irrefutable that no one is criminal by
birth but
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birth, but
some circumstances and needs of the life which make them criminal.In fact
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biggest issue
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the biggest issue
in all around the world.
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, It is often argued that nothing can be done to overcome
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. I completely disagree with
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the opponent
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become
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becomes
mental habits of the layman.
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is because It is
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the easiest way
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the basic needs
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and people do
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intentionally to
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they do
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who not believe in work.
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deliberately to
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fulfil
their needs among 2018-20 in India.
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, It is mental habits of the human beings which is too difficult to change.
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, I deem that there are lots of ways to overcome these problems.
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,
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the government
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should make
some strict rules and legislation, and imbibe to augment imprisonment periods of time.
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crime rate
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the crime rate
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nation is too
negligible which
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negligible, which
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, people may avoid
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doing
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due to
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arduous rule.
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, social organization should
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organise some awareness programme to drawback
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problem
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.In brief, most of the criminals do
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only when they are victimized by mental disorders
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,
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mental disorders increase the ailment
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as anxiety and hypertension and there are only one solution for
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problem
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is awareness programme.
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, people are less attracted
toward
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to
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In recapitulation,
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I
strongly believe that government and social organization work together prudently
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and should make some strict rule to overcome
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problem
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.In fact,
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is an obviously inimical
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problem but
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problem, but
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not that
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problem
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can not solve.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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