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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion.

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There is now an argument whether specific talents, namely,
sport
 and
music
, are only naturally born in a person or can be taught and trained gradually.
Although
 many people have the nature of these talents, I believe all men can learn to be good at them. On the one hand, genetic factors have a huge impact on obtaining skills. In fact, a lot of children nowadays show a great artistic favour towards specific fields at
such
 a young age.
In particular
, being born in an art-traditional family or early approach to art can affect a child’s awareness and interest.
Moreover
, these talents for
sport
 and
music
 require great interest and some inborn abilities,
such
 as creativity or emotional expressions which cannot be learned and copied.
On the other hand
, I think anyone can learn the talents for
music
 or
sport
 and become specialized a
t
Suggestion
in
them. There is one saying: Nothing is impossible. In fact,
sport
 and
music
 are all about skills and hard work. If one has enough determination and motivation, becoming a talented s
portsperson
or musician is not unrealistic. To conclude,
although
 the genetic factors are important for the talents for
sport
 and
music
, I believe everything can be learned, and so do these talents.
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