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Writing task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic: Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, In
development
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developing
 world to animals effect losing some kind of valuable resources of animals in the world. What do we do against
this
 danger, people are changed way of
life
.
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 essay will do discussions at
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 details
by
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with
 examples.
First
 of all,
this
 fact is true, people try to
keeps
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keep
 animals kinds vanish taken to
ahead
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a head
 of precious resources from the planet. There are the main rules for
animals safety
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the animals' safety
animals' safety
animal safety
animal's safety
 and
much
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many
 places are isolated for living animals and so much convenience have keeping of animals. Every
countries
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country
are accepted
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is accepted
 important rules animals
is
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are
 disappearance valuable resources to all animals in the areas.
However
, Some people are killed taken to pleasure and their things take for
ornament
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ornament, such
such
 as teeth
,
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,
skin and
ekspanat
. Again others are hunting it can be changed traditional habit. I think that animals don't wake dangerous and vanish
animals
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animal
 species
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connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 valuable resources, per people need protect and make a
special
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speciality
 of places for living as well as they need to accretion more and more with partners. In
currently
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currencies
, the forests are added more line, and the negatives leave waves
as a
result many
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result, many
 birds are dangers and they are killed, the people are decreased of waves as a reason electricity
companies
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company
leave
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leaves
 dangers waves of birds ways are
misleads
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misleading
 and they are killed
to
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for
 losing of ways. And in my opinion,
this
 is usually checking to
left
raise from a lower to a higher position
lift
 wages from electricity companies. To sum up,
the animals of
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the life of animals
life
is
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are
 keeping connected
too
in the direction of
to
 our
life
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lives
,
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,
so people are
safed
rescued; especially from the power and consequences of sin
saved
 every
animals
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animal
 of valuable
life
. 260 words

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