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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?

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These days a considerable amount of research demonstrates that the effect of
car
usage
 threat individuals’ health condition. Not only people’s well-being, but
also
 the World is getting warmer because of global warming. One of the most significant factor that causes global warming is fuel oil, which is produced by
car
 and the other sort of motor
vehicles
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vehicle
. In my opinion, people
should be tend
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should tend
 to
using
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use
 public
transportation
, bicycle and more environmentally friendly
transportation
 types.
This
 essay will examine how people’s
transportation
 habits can be changed.
First
 of all, the
fundemental
serving as an essential component
fundamental
 reason
usage
 of
car
 might uncomfortable public
transportation
 features. Sometimes people try to access their destination with public
transportation
, they come across
vary
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varying
varied
 problems;
such
 as too crowded buses or buses do not obey their time-table. Increasing bus
frequence
the number of occurrences within a given time period
frequency
frequencies
 and taking place a few restrictions in order to follow their
timeline
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timelines
 aids to solve them. If these
criterias
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
criteria
critters
creatures
 could be
maximize
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maximized
, individuals would have not
prefer
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preferred
 their
car
 anymore. In recent times, companies contribute
with
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to
new sytem
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the new system
new system
a new system
.
For instance
, many huge
company
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companies
 consider
this
 issue,
then
 they provide
shuttle
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a shuttle
 for their employees to come the Office. When massive companies can experience that, the smaller firms try to adapt the latest
transportation
 way for arriving their working area.
Secondly
,
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 have
responsibilites
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
 in terms of their citizens acknowledge about
relation
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the relation
 between using
car
the work of providing treatment for or attending to someone or something
care
 and global warming, and supporting the other
transportation
 forms. Society will figure out
value
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the value
 of
enviroment
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the environment
environment
, if the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
give
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gives
 an education for enlightening their
citiziens
a native or naturalized member of a state or other political community
citizens
 about
this
 problem and manage their country with perception into protecting the nature. An example for
importance
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the importance
 of education; in general people do not notice that cars have
active role
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an active role
active roles
 for obesity due to lack of movement. Individuals should be
prometed
contribute to the progress or growth of
promoted
permitted
printed
 go somewhere by walking. The
next
 option might bicycle for decreasing
usage
 of cars. More stunning things can rise
bicyles’
a wheeled vehicle that has two wheels and is moved by foot pedals
bicycles
 demanding, like well-constructed roads or safety rules for cycling.
In
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To
 sum up, there
are
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is
 a wide range of solutions for dealing with
usage
 of cars. Ordinary people and
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 ought to
collebarate
behave as expected during of holidays or rites
celebrate
collaborate
 one another for
decrasing
becoming less or smaller
decreasing
 consumption of fuel oil.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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