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Many cities have installed cameras in public places in order to reduce crime. However, some people think that those cameras restrict our privacy. Do you think the advantages of this system outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many cities have set up videos in public places with an eye to decrease the numbers of criminals. Though, some individuals suppose that those cameras limit our private life. So,
this
 essay, analysing the issue from multiple perspectives, will provide some data to the pros and cons.
First
 of all, the number one advantage to mount these cameras in the streets, it is security of citizens. Cameras can observe the situation in the streets for 24/7, which help to reveal different situations in a town.
For instance
, if someone will faint, special part of the police department, will establish the street and send the ambulance car.
However
, there could be one problem,
this
 expensive camera cannot install everywhere in the town
Secondly
, cameras can record all day long, that support the low level of crime where
this
 camera installed.
this
Suggestion
This
 will happen because of, all criminals will know that their attempts to make a crime will be fix 24/7, and they will try to avoid public places where cameras set up.
For example
, thief wont go to make a crime where will be cameras
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