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The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The total amount of calling duration used by telephoning categories in the UK is illustrated in the bar chart
in
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 the period of 7 years from 1995 to 2002. 3 different calling types mentioned include local – fixed
line
, national and international – fixed
line
, and mobile calls. All
figure
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 are measured in
billions
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 minutes. It can be clearly seen from the column graph that calling time by local fixed
line
, the majority
line
 in three calling types, had fluctuated remarkably between 1995 and 2002 and in the year
of
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2002, the figure was the same as the one at the starting point; meanwhile, both national and international fixed
line
 and mobiles calls had been increasing gradually. At that starting point in 1995, the total telephoning time used by local fixed
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 was above 70 billion minutes, which was
doubled
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 the one used by national and international
line
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. In the first 4 years from 1995 to 1999, local calls experienced a slight increase and peaked at 90 billion minutes in 1999, followed by a
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 drop
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 the beginning of the
21th
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 century. Between 1995 and 1999, the number of calls used by national and international cables and mobiles grew
up of
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 approximately
of
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10%. Since 1999, calling times by mobiles have
been
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soared significantly;
whereas
 national and international
line
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 kept rising slowly.

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