The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar chart below illustrates information about the total number of
minutes
of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three types in 7
years
from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, the graph demonstrates data about the total
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phone calls in Britain in three different sections:
mobiles
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, national and international, and local. It is clear from the bar chart that the local type accounted
highest
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rate in all 7
years
. In 1999, the number of
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minutes
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local calls took the highest proportion with 90
billion
minutes
. In the
year
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1997, 1998 and 2000 the
amount
of time for
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call
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was high with 85, 89 and 83
minutes
respectively. The
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local was in low percentage with 72
billion
minutes
for 1995 and 2002,
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and 79
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billion
minutes
for 1996 and 2001. Turning to 2 rest of the sections, the more
years
were, the more calls were. In 2002, the calls had
highest
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proportion with 62
billion
minutes
for national
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and 40
billion
for
mobiles
. From 1995 to 2001, the
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calls
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high with 50, 56,
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and 60
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billion
minutes
for national calls and 10, 21,
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and 38
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billion
minutes
for
mobiles
.
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rest of the
years
were in low
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with 2, 4, 6,
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billion
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for
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and 49
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billion
minutes
for national calls.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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