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Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of school day. Other believe that students should spend the whole day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reason and details to support your answer.

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Physical
exercise
 is an
intergral
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
integral
 part of a man's
day
.They provide the person
ith
expresses the means used
with
 energy and
enthusisam
a feeling of excitement
enthusiasm
 to complete the work of the
day
.So, I believe physical
exercise
 should be a required part of the
day
. It will provide the children with the energy and increase their focus and concentration towards studies.They will be able to concentrate better on
thier
of them or themselves
their
 classes. In India, most of the schools do practice yoga before the school hours, I think it should be implemented in all the schools
world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
 as by practising yoga it increases the blood flow towards the brain and is
proved
Suggestion
proven
 to increase the memory power of children.
Also
, meditation is a part of yoga which will help
th
definite article
the
 children to calm themselves and overcome any anxiety they experience. Physical
exercise
 will increase the blood
flo
the motion characteristic of fluids (liquids or gases)
flow
 towards the
muscules
one of the contractile organs of the body
muscles
 and brain, whereby the children will feel more active throughout the
day
 and will help them to perform better on their curriculum.
Also
, since children come from different families the mandatory physical
exercise
 in schools will help them to lead and healthy lifestyle and reduce the incidence of diseases and
thus
 help in
improvement
Suggestion
the improvement
 of their
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
.

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