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The table below shows the primary funding sources of international students in the US during the years 2003/04 and 2013/14. Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer describing the data and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the primary funding sources of international students in the US during the years 2003/04 and 2013/14. Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer describing the data and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table provides information about 5 categories of primary sources of funding to forget students in America between 2003/04 and 2013/14.
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 sponsorship came from personal and family, U.S college, Foreign government, Current Employer, and other sources over the ten years period. It is noticeable that the total
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funding witnessed a
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 2003/04 and 2013/14, from 572,509 to 886,052.
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 the proportion of primary funding
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 other sources in the US reached the bottom, at -14%
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 the same period. Both Personal and Family and US College or University saw the first
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second
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 biggest increase in the number of
overseas
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student
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 during ten years period, starting at 2003/04, by about 100,000 and approximately 50,000, respectively.
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, Foreign government or University and Current
Employer
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 obtained a vast percentage change, with 383% and 390%, sequentially.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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