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In many countries, an increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Governments have always been looking for the roots of the
crime
 so they would be able to mitigate the offence rate in society. In some nations, it is considered that TV programmes and
video
 games with violent content are to blame for
this
 increasing trend.
This
 essay will discuss that
although
 exposure to violent images can contribute to the rise in crimes, other factors must be taken into account as well. There is no doubt that violent TV shows and
video
 games can be contributed to the growth of the
crime
 by sensitization. Indeed, these programs and games can operate,
such
 as a stimulus to motivate the aggressive and offensive sense which is existed in everyone's subconscious.
For instance
, the result of a study indicates that students who spend long hours to watch violent movies or play games involving guns and killing show more bullying
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
 rather than their peers. In consequence, exposure to violent scenes can have a negative effect on people’s behaviour. Forasmuch as criminality is a complex subject, so TV show and
video
 games are not the only elements linked to its rise. Economic issues play an important role in the formation of crimes and social deviations so that
unemployment
 leads to
poverty
, and there is a significant relationship between
poverty
,
unemployment
 and increasing
crime
 and violence in the country.
Unemployment
 is another influencing factor in the emergence of
crime
. The findings suggest that
unemployment
 is at the root of many crimes as it exacerbates
poverty
, and in some cases leads many crimes.
Hence
, some factors are contributed to emerging
crime
 excepting media exposure.
This
 essay discussed that while violent images on television and in computer and
video
 games might encourage people to commit the
crime
, other factors like
unemployment
 and
poverty
 can be effective to rise criminal offences. So, I partly agree with the impact of violent scenes on television and movies or
video
 games.
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