Tourism is an ever growing industry.what benefits it brings to society and individual

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there is

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growing in

tourism

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the tourism industry

industry

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are so many benefits

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it can bring to both

society

and individual.

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several benefits are presented below

there

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There

are many benefits it can bring to

society

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the

first

place, ever growing

tourism

industry

can make the

society

more wealthy because there are several travellers who from both native and foreign countries buy things in one

society

which they travel

such

as several

souveniers

something of sentimental value

souvenirs

that very meaningful

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the

second

place, the growing

tourism

industry

give

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gives

a valuable chance to let people who from different backgrounds exchange their

cultures

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culture

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tourism

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tourists

can

also

give the types of the benefits to

individual

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individuals

the individual

an individual

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The

first

aspect that we can see easily is that individual person who want to go overseas can have more convenient travelling process because with the

industry

growing

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the many

tourism

services developed.

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The

second

aspect that

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deserves

to say is that with the

tourism

industry

developing, make the people

experience

different cultures more easily than ever before

as a result

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(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

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have a more chance to

experience

the culture that differ from them.

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the individual person

individual persons

individual people

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experience

different cultures and societies

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with the

tourism

industry

growing

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it is giving valuable benefits to both

society

and individual.

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People

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can easily

experience

different cultures which they very strange for and give the chance to travel overseas more convenient.

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benefits that can give to

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