Tourism is an ever growing industry.what benefits it brings to society and individual

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industry

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more wealthy because there are several travellers who from both native and foreign countries buy things in one

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services developed.

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different cultures more easily than ever before

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growing

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different cultures which they very strange for and give the chance to travel overseas more convenient.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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262 words

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