Nowadays people are spending more time away from their homes because they spend longer in their workplace. Write the advantages and disadvantages.

These days monthly people spending more
time
away from their
home
because they spend longer in their workplace. I will
discuss the both
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discuss both the
advantages and disadvantages.
To begin
with, there are numerous
benefit
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beneficial
when the people
are do
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do
are doing
have done
the work away from
home
.
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.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all
,
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,
they can give more
time
in their office and enhance the
skill but
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skill, but
stay
home
cannot achieve skills.
Furthermore
,
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,
they will be become independent in their life as well as
this
is more beneficial for
shapping
any process serving to define the shape of something
shaping
sapping
shopping
their career.
Moreover
, when they away from
home they
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home, they
will mingle with other
people
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people, therefore
people therefore
therfore
those can increase the experience about the business as well as get the promotion
therfore
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therefore
they
are achieve
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are achieving
have achieved
the worldly knowledge and understand the responsibilities their work
besides
, it is
greate impact
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a great impact
great impact
greater impact
on the health when they away from
home
and
then
those
are do not give
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are not given
aren't given
haven't given
proper attention on health
therfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
they
are consume
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are consuming
are consumed
consume
unhealthy food
.
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apart
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Apart
form
,
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,
it is
also
will be
impact
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impacted
on bonding with family because when they will be
spend
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spending
more
time
in their office and
then
will be gradually distance increase with their family members.
In addition
, these days each
people
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person's
person
desire to earn
more money
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more money, therefore
more money therefore
therfore
people have
hectic schedule
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a hectic schedule
hectic schedules
. When they give more
time
same position in
job
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a job
the job
in their office
this
is lead to medical problems,
such
as heart disease
,
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,
obesity
,
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,
blood pressure.
To
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In
conclusion, it is true each
people
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person
want earn more
money but
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money, but
should be
distance
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the distance
between professional and personal commitments
therfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
spend more
time
with family members
.
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.
the
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The
disadvantage
outweigh
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outweighs
of
this
advantage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career progression
  • earning potential
  • enhanced productivity
  • skill sets
  • work-life balance
  • personal well-being
  • negatively impacting
  • increased stress
  • health issues
  • burnout
  • cardiovascular diseases
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