Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
consumerist world, the competition has been increased
,
Accept space
,
as a result
maifold
local businesses have died out
ehich
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
replace to the supermarkets.
However
,
this
does not bring the closure of the local community. I deem that it affects only on some initial level. Let's ponder deeper to have more
clearity
free from obscurity and easy to understand; the comprehensibility of clear expression
clarity
on
this
topic. To
inaugrate
make into a whole or make part of a whole
integrate
with, it is irrefutable that local shops
has become
Suggestion
have become
had become
a part and partial
for
Suggestion
to
the people as they do not have to travel to the
supermaarket
a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods
supermarket
and
also
don't
neet
require as useful, just, or proper
need
not
to waste the time to buy
such
basic items simultaneously.
However
, if the local enterprises may closed, it will not as much endanger for the local
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
assistance
. As in the case of
imergancy
a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action
emergency
emergencies
, when people do not have enough time to waste for getting the items, lack of local shops may generate
such
troubles. To cite an example, in a society, the route of supermarket is 20 minutes far
,
Accept space
,
than nobody prefer to go there for buy
such
vegetables and grocery. At the same time, supermarket proves as a boon for myriad people through which we can get all kinds of items
at
Suggestion
in
a single place.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
in many cities people prefer to buy items from supermarkets and shopping malls, as nowadays they
also includes
Suggestion
also include
entertaintment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
facilities
such
as cinema and restaurants.
Next
to that
,
Accept space
,
it will much beneficial for a community as well. As the supermarket provides a platform to sell the products
for
Suggestion
to
the locals.
Furthermore
, they
also
provide jobs to the existence.
This
way they can avoid the long distance travelling to get their bread and butter. To
synopsize
,
Accept space
,
I pen down with saying that diminishing local shops may not threaten the existing of local people. Even, I
eckon
expect, believe, or suppose
reckon
that it will provide more opportunities.
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