Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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consumerist world, the competition has been increased

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local businesses have died out

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interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class

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replace to the supermarkets.

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does not bring the closure of the local community. I deem that it affects only on some initial level. Let's ponder deeper to have more

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free from obscurity and easy to understand; the comprehensibility of clear expression

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topic. To

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make into a whole or make part of a whole

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with, it is irrefutable that local shops

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have become

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the people as they do not have to travel to the

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a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods

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require as useful, just, or proper

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basic items simultaneously.

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, if the local enterprises may closed, it will not as much endanger for the local

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the state or fact of existing

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assistance

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a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action

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, when people do not have enough time to waste for getting the items, lack of local shops may generate

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troubles. To cite an example, in a society, the route of supermarket is 20 minutes far

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than nobody prefer to go there for buy

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vegetables and grocery. At the same time, supermarket proves as a boon for myriad people through which we can get all kinds of items

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a single place.

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in many cities people prefer to buy items from supermarkets and shopping malls, as nowadays they

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also include

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an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention

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as cinema and restaurants.

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it will much beneficial for a community as well. As the supermarket provides a platform to sell the products

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the locals.

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, they

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provide jobs to the existence.

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way they can avoid the long distance travelling to get their bread and butter. To

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I pen down with saying that diminishing local shops may not threaten the existing of local people. Even, I

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expect, believe, or suppose

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that it will provide more opportunities.

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