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In many societies, elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their ageing members. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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With the advent of advanced technologies, social liberation and fast paced life, family structures have considerably changed in order to
adopt
make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapt
 to
environment
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the environment
 they live in. One of the common family patterns which have emerged these days is that of fewer children, working parents and elder members living in
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 homes. Speaking on the
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 mentioned trend, despite intuitive beliefs of
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 being inappropriate as families should always
care
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 for aging members, there are some practical reasons for
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 an arrangement being good for everyone.
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 essay will discuss two aspects that will show why
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 homes are good for elderly.
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, one of the most difficult enemies of
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
 people is loneliness that can be avoided in
retirement
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 homes. Elderly people can find more people of their generation with whom they can share their feelings and feel more comfortable.
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, my grandparents could never relate to 21st century topics discussed in my home. They were happy in bygone nostalgia and could mingle among the people of their generation.
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 homes helps their mental health to be in a very good shape.
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, elderly people need specialized
care
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 which they can feel confident about.
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 homes are well equipped with
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 professionals who take
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 of
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 minute needs and deliver them to elderly people in the most efficient way.
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 is almost not perfectly possible in family as family members are busy with
creation
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the creation
 of their career.
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,
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 homes become an integral part
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of
 well being of elderly people. Having discussed above two aspects of companionship and
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, it is plausible that
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 homes are rather better options for aging people. So the taboo of
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 homes should be erased and recognized as necessary social organisations in our society. Top

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