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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.

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The data show the changes in the volume of fast food
consumption
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 in Melbourne.
In contrast
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 to 2005 and now there is no slight difference.
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, the expectation is that the expenditure of junk food will increase drastically in 2025. In 2005
consumption
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 of Hamburger is reduced than current
consumption
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.
On the other hand
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, the demand for fried chicken,
salad
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, fried rice, and noodles has increased. The significant change in demand for
salad
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 is enormous, it is tripled in comparison to other fast-food meals.
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 to that, fried rice and noodles are consumed more than 2005 by 30%. The data underlines that the amount of hamburger,
salad
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, and fried chicken utilization will increase exponentially in 2025. The expectation for
salad
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consumption
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 will rise almost the same percentage between 2005 and
this
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 year by 300%.
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, the number of people who prefer hamburgers and fried chicken will not draw the same curve as
salad
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 buyers, the change will be less than 50%
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 to
this
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 year.
As a result
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, the future forecast of exponential growth is concerning the authorities.

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