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What would happen to Earth if humans disappeared?

#earth #humans
This
 documentary shows from different aspects how would change the Earth without people. If humanity would disappear it couldn't be the end
for
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of
 the world. Earth is the crucial part for people
Firstly
, we can notice how in the
first
 day cars would be crashed and after few hours explode.
Moreover
, every part of the
cities
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city
 would bombed by chemical emissions
,
Accept space
,
also
 air pollution would effect on
animals
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animal
animals'
animal's
 health. Factories would destroy themselves because nobody couldn't control their work.
Secondly
, animals would
suffering
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suffer
 because of the starvation and their altitude for food.
However
, air pollution would increase a hundred times more, which shows how without human it would be
destroying
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destroyed
,
Accept space
,
but after few decades nature would clean and refresh
air
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the air
 To sum up, all animals would be alive without animals and every part of the
cities
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city
 would be filled
by
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with
 water.
This
 documentary shows how the Earth could be without us, but we couldn't
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