the chart below shows the precentage of people who ate five protions of fruite and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
the chart below shows the
percentage
of people who ate five portions
of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
The diagram below illustrates the citizen's value who consume five portions
of fruit and vegetables a day around the UK from
the period between 2001 and 2008
ordinarily, the number of citizens who ate five Change preposition
in
portions
of veggies increased each year, leading to a significant rise in the UK and decline
gradually until 2006. Meanwhile, woman's consumption Correct article usage
a decline
was
hit a peak as high as those Unnecessary verb
apply
for
any other gender every year.
In 2001, the Change preposition
of
percentage
of children
ate
5 Correct pronoun usage
who ate
portions
of veggies per day located at over 10% whereas
men
earned more than 15% and woman's percentage
was highest at over 20%. In the next
3 years, children
and men
were stabilized while
women grew sharply and earned over 25% in 2003
In 2006, the percentage
of children
, women, men
reached peaks of over 20%, 25%, Correct word choice
and men
30
% respectively. Correct word choice
and 30
By contrast
, in the next
2 years, all the categories declined gradually except men
which maintained
in 2007. In 2008, the Add a missing verb
was maintained
percentage
of citizens decreased to over 20% for children
, while
25% for men
and 30% for women..
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