The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University in 2009.

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The bar chart makes a comparison between the proportion of overseas

students

and

students

achieving

second

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second-class

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class

or higher

degree

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degrees

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across a range of disciplines at

University in 2009 In general, both

students

and international

students

were able to gain

second

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second-class

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class

degrees

The percentage of international

students

gaining higher

degrees

in Electrical engineering and Information technology was higher than

students

. The vast majority of foreign

students

obtained

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who obtained

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second

class

was

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were

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in information technology (approximately 81

percent

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per cent

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). Similar numbers of both types of

students

achieved higher

degrees

in nursing and accountancy (about 88

percent

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per cent

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and 60

percent

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) Meanwhile, the

english

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English

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literature, art history, international law,

sociology

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and sociology

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higher

degrees

were attained by more

students

than

the

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apply

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foreign

students

Whereas

percent

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students

gained higher

degrees

in international law, only

did

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apply

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percent

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international

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of international

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students

. The most popular subjects

which

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that

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students

choose to get

second

class

were art history and sociology (about 80

percent

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, uk, second, class, degrees, percent with synonyms.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

159 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University in 2009.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

It is common that in many companies people from different ages work together in a same team. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantges?

Many social media accounts are fake What problems does ths cause? What Solatons can you suget?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?