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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.

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when
Suggestion
When
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 travel to
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 countries they should to adapt to the local. Most cultures have similarities between them
but but are
Suggestion
but are
 mostly unique. In my
opinion it
Accept comma addition
opinion, it
 is alright to adapt to another culture because we can learns and
values culture
Accept comma addition
values, culture
 and tradition of the host countries.
these
Suggestion
These
 days, so many people travels to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 counties to see the beauty of
countries
Suggestion
the countries
. Since people merely visit different places for a short time.
in
Suggestion
In
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 hand before people travels they have to learn the culture and tradition
for example
, traditional food,
langguage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
languages
 and
also
 traditional customs.
To begin
 with, the group of people believes that visitors travel to understand the cultural differences and enjoy
traditions
Suggestion
the traditions
 of different places.

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