Many of the products we buy nowadays break or wear out very quickly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for manufacturers and the public?

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In the past few decades, the manufacturing industry has witnessed a boom,
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consumers. Many argue that the
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of these items does not
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for a long time. There are advantages and disadvantages associated with
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with, the developed countries have a stronger economy, and many of them have
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full-time employment to support themselves. So, many manufacturing companies focus most of their
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them, as they can afford to re-buy the
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, even after they
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been broken down or simply worn down in their
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. These companies make their profits by selling
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products
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for a good
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, and
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, generate profitable balance
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.
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, if their
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are undermined in
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quality
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then
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those customers may turn away from them and look
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manufacture
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, who may sell
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products
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for a reasonable
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price
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tag.
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,
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consumers nowadays search for cheaper
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, and they may be willing
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the
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over the
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.
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is because it gives them
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freedom to choose
goods
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frequently without having to be stuck with the old items.
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, electronic
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often change
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in
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a short span of time,
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, they buy the most updated
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on the market.
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,
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put strain on their pockets, if they keep up with
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style of buying. There are shards of evidence, which
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that many youngsters have cut down on their food over
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shopping
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goods
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. In conclusion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because the
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are sold at affordable
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price
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prices
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to the consumers, and they do not need to pay a higher
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than
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they
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deserve.
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