In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a home with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

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Nowadays, teenagers tend to live alone when they finish graduation.
Therefore
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, they want to live away from their parents and sharing a rented
house
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with their friends.
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essay will
disscuse
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discusses
this
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trend. There are many advantages of letting teenagers live independently after finishing school.
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, young people can gain more experience. They have to take care of themselves when they sick, do the
house
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chores
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as washing the dishes, cooking and cleaning.
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,
instead
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of playing video games, they have to do the
house
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chores.
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, young people can become more mature. They don’t need to depend on anybody, while at home, they rely on their parents. They will face more problems when they are outside.
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, if teenagers are sick, their parents will care for them, but when they live individually, they have to take care of
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
.
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, youngsters can have more privacy.
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, you are studying and your parents are singing karaoke, the noise will distract you.
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to say, young people can focus more on their career or their
further
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studies.
in
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In
conclusion, there are many benefits for young people
to leave
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leave
their parents
house
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and live alone.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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