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The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university.

The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university.
These data sources clearly communicate how many journal
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 weekly by all
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, PhD
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 and junior lecturers at a university in Australia.
Overall
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, what stands out from the data is that the
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 studying
doctorates
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 read at least 12
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 per week, more than all
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 and junior
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. Looking
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 chart with more details, the vast majority (75%) of undergraduates
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 1 to 4
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 per week, compared to all
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 in
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slightly lower,
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65%.
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, between 5 and 10
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 by undergraduates,
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 the figure for all
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 was higher
3
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%. For the
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 spend 1 to 4 hours on reading than
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 remaining categories, with the figure standing at 5% and 18% respectively. Meanwhile, around 77%
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students
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spending
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 11 hours or more at an Australian university,
whereas
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 there were only 5% and around 12% the number of
undergraduates
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the undergraduates
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 and all
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 use
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 time for reading
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