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Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As people have paid taxes to the
government
, it is believed that they should be provided with free
healthcare
 and qualified
education
.
However
, others disagree with the statement, as they think that each individual should be responsible for his or her own
health
 and
education
. The following essay will discuss both views in details. On the one hand, many people believe that it is the
government
's responsibility to provide standard
health
 care and decent
education
to
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for
 their people. As people have paid income taxes, property taxes, value added taxes and other kinds of fees to the
government
, these funds should
also
 be beneficial for the people as well. Some portions of the budget should be allocated to fund medical activities and educational programs. Having a lot of educated and healthy residents brings many benefits for the
government
, as there are a lot of skill and productive labours in the country who would develop the country's economic sector.
On the other hand
, some people believe that
health
 and
education
 is a personal matter as it is the responsibility of each individual to maintain own their
health
 and
education
. They disagree if
education
 and
healthcare
 should be funded from the taxes. They think that it is unfair because some people might be working hard and paid a large amount of taxes, but others might be indolent or jobless and get the same benefits from the
government
.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 believe that
healthcare
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health care
 and
education
 should be standalone institutions, and each
people
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person
 should pay for getting a good
education
 and maintaining their own
health
. In conclusion, to a certain point, I would agree that it is the
government
's task to provide
education
 and
healthcare
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health care
 for their people, as some poor people might not be able to get a good
education
 and decent
healthcare
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health care
.
However
,
although
 these services might be provided by the
government
 for free, each individual's must be responsible for their own
education
 and
healthcare
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health care
, as these services are funded by taxes that are paid by the public
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